11.8.09

Attempt #2

4 comments:

Vaughan Ling said...

This one works much better. Some of the white outlines are flattening the forms. Nice hotspot on the body. More of the engine detail picking up that hotspot would reinforce it.

Zack Stephanchick said...

the rendering's working for me, your perspective seems a bit off though.

seems like your handlebars are too far back or the front wheel is too far out

i think in this perspective the wheel would be more hidden by the body.

Jon Russell said...

yeah I think its working pretty well... but your perspective is a little off, mainly on that rear wheel i think. another thing is that its pretty muddy.

i do think there are some good things to take from this though.

Matt Kulczycki said...

Fun style but be more confident with your pen strokes they especially where you want your focal point